Tuesday, October 10, 2006

“kalau papa dan mama tak ada” – pesanan untuk ‘abang’

“kalau papa dan mama tak ada”
pesanan untuk ‘abang’

kalau papa dan mama tak ada..
abang tolong adik tukar lampin dia
pergi ke kolam KLCC berdua
bancuhkan susu adik 3 sudu sebotol
dodoikan adik bila nak tidur

kalau papa dan mama tak ada..
abang peluk adik bila menangis
goncangkan buai, kongsi mainan
pujuk kalau merajuk
belai kalau mengamuk

kalau papa dan mama tak ada..
abang pegang tangan adik bila berjalan
perhati lariannya di padang
kalau terjatuh, cepatlah rangkul
sapukan luka, tuamkan lebam

tapi abang janganlah susah
sekarang papa dan mama ada sebelah
pejamkan mata hilangkan gundah
ajami hashim 101006
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thestoryteller tulis this very simple & kelakar but loving & sexy poem.. bicaraskrip ‘adaptasikan’ menggunakan method “Give me the same thing.. only different!”.

“Hek-eleh!” (NOT the only Melayu poem I’ve ever written)
Hek-eleh!
Anakku memang gitu,
Kejap nak susu,
kejap tak nak.
Takut papa main PS2,
takut papa tak main PS2.
Bila papa chakap ‘busy’,
anakku merengek.

Bila papa chakap ‘nak gi keja’,
anakku terkinja-kinja (nak ikut).

Sudahlah.
Papa dah penat.
Tak de masa.
Banyak ‘posting’ lain.
Banyak mata ‘blogger’ lain
yang gian nak
‘ber-blogging’
dengan blog papa.
Banyak ‘comment’ lain
yang hauskan
idea papa.

Hidung papa yang mancung tak mancung,
kemek tak kemek,
Kembang atau kuncup,
sentiasa sedia mencium mu.

Bayangkan,
seperti yang anakku pernah bayangkan.
Hidung papa, di pipi mu.
Hidung papa, di dahi mu.
Di mata mu.
Di dagu mu.
Di ubun-ubun mu.
Di telinga mu.
Di telapak tangan mu.
Di telapak kaki mu.

Bayangkanlah.
Jangan geli-geli.
Bukan papa tak tahu.
Memang anakku selalu mahu begitu.

Hek-eleh!
Anakku memang gitu.
Dah tahu
papa sangat sayang kamu.
ajami hashim 091006

8 comments:

Anonymous said...

Comelnyer...

Deeba said...

ajami, some people hates jargon like me..given the chance, Deeba memang minat in this area BUT appreciate if you could share scripwriting or film making in reality , the truth about being scripwriting, what the do's and the dont's , exaample of good scripts, not too much with theories and names that are so difficult to pronounce..

what is "good script" ? Is it a script full with words yang berbunga-bunga..i know a script is not only words, it can appear as the so-called "sub-text" like the one you cakap like zillion of times already.BUT WHAT IS GOOD SCRIPT?

how can Goodwill Hunting won Best Original Script(betul, kan?) What are the criteria? usually khalayak would appreciate the movie as a whole rather that the script itself..Will All Good Script will result to a Good movie OR the other way round?

Chiao...

P/S : Kalau mama dan papa tak ada, Deeba angkut aje dua-dua nanti...

yasmin said...

"kalau papa dan mama tak ada" is so beautiful and made me cry...

Anonymous said...

Good Will Hunting won for best writing, screenplay written directly for the screen by matt damon and ben affleck.

this film has a brilliant script !!

-samasam-

bicaraskrip said...

deeba,
u POV, taken!.. cuma 'lain padang, lain belalang' coz 4 me there's NO RIGHT/WRONG in scriptwriting nk ikut theory or watever style pon.. suma ada +/-.. yg ptg writer kena ada 'asas' Xkiralah dr sapa/apa/mana dia dpt.. blog bicaraskrip open 2 all theory/style (or watever ppl wan 2 cal it).. i Xbias 2 mana2 'school of thought'..

yasmin,
papa cry too.. mama cry too.. glad that u 'cry' aso!.. lets CRY TOGETHER2 lah!.. fyi, that poem is 'a tragedy' yg i hope, NEVER EVER happen right now or later!.. Na'uzubillah!

samasam,
i stuju bangeett wt u > 'Good Will Hunting' IS A BRILLIANT SCRIPT!

Anonymous said...

so sweet..... tapi tak apa nanti alif + aiman boleh kawan dengan pak tam yer... mama + papa jgn risau yer....

Pak Tam

bicaraskrip said...

pak tam,
fyi
'abang' is 'aliff eiman ajami'
'adik' is 'awal amien ajami'

merekalah,
sumber inspirasi
nafas hidupku
malam & siang
bulan & bintang
ombak & pantai
segalanya..

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